i fell that i could have used more descriptive language and i did wall with show not tell.
The old cabin
As the powerful wind grows stronger the thunder starts to grow. He slouches on the wall then he starts thinking of how he failed to keep them safe from the people of the town. Terror starts to grow throughout the night . Trees start crashing down and the sound of leaves crunching get louder and louder. The fear starts to take over his body he starts to tremble in fear How will he escape.
Without warning the sound of wolves howling grows louder as more join the pack.After hearing wolves howling all night He hears scratching on the old ragged cabin.The door knob turns slowly His heart starts pounding as fast as a race car who is it is it the town or hunters it could be people running away? Who could it be.
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